All poems and short stories ya'll crazies come up with, post them here. I have a few. But I'll start with this one about Doom. It is complete and utter shit cause I wrote it when I was 10. I'll through up a revised version as well
[Original]
Walking down the dark corridor
Smelling death and sour lemons
Hearing a hiss, a growl, a moan
Looking around at what used to be “home”
Stepping through what once had life
Hoping none come back
From what which they had been dead
Suddenly I heard a scrape
Vainly I had wished to rake
The soul of that attacking me
Routing death upon thee
Again I heard that infernal graze
Of what sounded of a metal raze
Pivoting as fast as I could
Looking for the thing that would
Create that noise of what came to be
That of which surrounded me
Nothing
I turned back around
Looking straight at the ground
While I stared, I horridly noticed
That my legs, my legs are broken
The reason why I feel that fear
I got no pain, I felt no tears
That is why I figured out
My brain is dead, my feeling’s out
I am alive, that is no lie
But I am dead, without a doubt
I am one that walk the earth
Hoping my longevity is not eternal
[Revised]
Walking down the darkened stair
The smell of sour lemons in the air
Hearing a hiss, a growl, a moan
Looking around at what used to be home
Stepping through what once had life
From what was a violent strife
Hoping nothing will come to stead
From what which once they had been dead
Suddenly I heard a scrape
Vainly I had wished to rake
The soul of that attacking me
Routing death upon thee
Again I heard that infernal graze
Of what sounded of a metal raze
Pivoting as fast as I could
Looking for the thing that would
Create that noise of what came to be
That of which surrounded me
Nothing
I shifted myself back around
Looking straight at the ground
While I stared, I horridly noticed
That my legs, my legs are broken
The reason why I feel that fear
I feel no pain, I felt no tears
That is why I figured out
My brain is dead, my feeling’s out
I am alive, that is no lie
But I am dead, without a doubt
I am one that walks a hollow shell
Hoping to be released from this hell.
My goodness. That was strenuous to revise.
[Original]
Walking down the dark corridor
Smelling death and sour lemons
Hearing a hiss, a growl, a moan
Looking around at what used to be “home”
Stepping through what once had life
Hoping none come back
From what which they had been dead
Suddenly I heard a scrape
Vainly I had wished to rake
The soul of that attacking me
Routing death upon thee
Again I heard that infernal graze
Of what sounded of a metal raze
Pivoting as fast as I could
Looking for the thing that would
Create that noise of what came to be
That of which surrounded me
Nothing
I turned back around
Looking straight at the ground
While I stared, I horridly noticed
That my legs, my legs are broken
The reason why I feel that fear
I got no pain, I felt no tears
That is why I figured out
My brain is dead, my feeling’s out
I am alive, that is no lie
But I am dead, without a doubt
I am one that walk the earth
Hoping my longevity is not eternal
[Revised]
Walking down the darkened stair
The smell of sour lemons in the air
Hearing a hiss, a growl, a moan
Looking around at what used to be home
Stepping through what once had life
From what was a violent strife
Hoping nothing will come to stead
From what which once they had been dead
Suddenly I heard a scrape
Vainly I had wished to rake
The soul of that attacking me
Routing death upon thee
Again I heard that infernal graze
Of what sounded of a metal raze
Pivoting as fast as I could
Looking for the thing that would
Create that noise of what came to be
That of which surrounded me
Nothing
I shifted myself back around
Looking straight at the ground
While I stared, I horridly noticed
That my legs, my legs are broken
The reason why I feel that fear
I feel no pain, I felt no tears
That is why I figured out
My brain is dead, my feeling’s out
I am alive, that is no lie
But I am dead, without a doubt
I am one that walks a hollow shell
Hoping to be released from this hell.
My goodness. That was strenuous to revise.
